i finished a second draft of my story's script in which i will be getting critique from the lecturers today to further develop and clarify the story.
"Rotten"
(Draft
Two)
By
Sean Davies
21
Whitaker Place, Grafton, Auckland 1010
0278004787
Vala_purity@Hotamail.com
FADE
IN:
INT.
POLICESTATION, BOSS OFFICE – MORNING
Kassler
is sitting at his Boss's desk eagerly awaiting his orders.
Boss
leaning in towards Kassler with partial light from behind him casting
heavy shadows in front.
BOSS:
“Kassler, as you are aware, crime is at an all time high. I need
your help in taking these criminals out”
EXT.
POLICE CAR, OUTSIDE VICTIM HOUSE – DAY
Kassler
is in the passenger seat mulling over the happenings of the case with
the Boss.
KASSLER:
“So Boss, what exactly has this criminal done for you to want
him caught so badly?"
The
Boss glances at Kassler with a look of distain and repugnance.
BOSS:
“He is just someone that needs to be taken out”.
Double
checking that they both have everything they need, they leave the car
and head towards the house.
EXT.
VICTIM HOUSE, OUTSIDE – DAY
The
Boss sees a window open and indicates for Kassler to follow.
Hesitantly
moving towards the window, Kassler looks at the front door for a
moment in a questionable glance.
INT.
VICTIM HOUSE, INSIDE – DAY
Once
inside, the Boss goes ahead and inspects every inch of the house with
Kassler following right behind him.
Kassler
notices that this house is of an ordinary appearance with nothing
giving any indication of anything sinister whatsoever.
As
they both make there way towards the bedroom, Kassler sees a lot of
things that have null importance to any sorts of crime, he then
begins to look at his Boss with a dubious impression.
INT.
VICTIM HOUSE, BEDROOM – DAY
Both
officers barge through the door, the unwitting victim jumps out of
bed with his hands as far up in the air as they go and a surprised
look on his face.
BOSS:
“Where's the drugs?”
the Boss screams while taking small items out of his coat and tossing
them on the floor in front of the victim. “What
is this then?” As he takes
out more paraphernalia off his person and throws them on the floor he
asks in a sarcastic manner, “So
this is what you have been hiding? I think we have what we need,
take him away Kassler.”
KASSLER:
“But sir didn't you just take those out of your...”
The
Boss interrupts abruptly as Kassler is about to let the truth out.
BOSS:
“Shut up Kassler, get this piece of shit out of my sight”.
Kassler
then arrests the innocent victim and walks off towards the police car
with a look of disagreement towards his Boss.
EXT.
POLICE CAR, OUTSIDE VICTIM HOUSE – DAY
In
the car, Kassler questions the victim about what had just happened.
The victim then describes how he was woken up to them barging in and
has never taken drugs in his life, he described himself as simple and
loyal.
Kassler
then having a realization (accompanied with flashbacks of key moments
about the Boss's deception), stops the car, lets the victim out and
then speeds off towards the police station with a vengeful look in
his eyes, determined to confront the Boss about his discovery.
EXT.
POLICE CAR, ON ROAD – AFTERNOON
As
Kassler is just about at the station, he notices that someone has
been following him for a while. The car that has been following him
gradually catches up which then rams him with the force of a rhino.
Kassler realizes that the person in the car is his Boss.
BOSS:
“No one can know about this Kassler, I must get rid of you!!!”
KASSLER:
“You used me Boss, People deserve to know the truth”
With
the Boss steaming in anger about his employee discovery the truth
behind his agenda and possibly destroying his career, he desperately
shunts Kasslers car in a last minute effort to stop him.
Both
cars spin wildly out of control, flipping and rolling multiple times
until they come to a stop in a pile of crushed metal.
EXT.
ROAD, CAR CRASH – NIGHT
Kassler
is seen gradually making his way out of the car, covered in blood and
badly injured.
As
he stumbles away from the crash scene, he turns around for just a
moment to sees his Boss torn apart, hanging halfway out of the front
windscreen with his entrails around him.
Kassler
sighs in releif.
INT.
POLICESTATION, KASSLERS OFFICE – MORNING
Kassler
is at his desk with his face in his hands, his mind aimlessly
wondering as he continues to debate about what happened the night
before.
As
soon as he begins to remember why his Boss tried to kill him, he
feels a tap on his shoulder followed by a small paper note with a
message, gently falling in front of him.
Kassler
instantly recognizes where he has seen those note from, with a
flashback of the first scene of Kassler at his Boss's desk; the stack
of small notes are clearly identifiable next to the boss.
Confused,
he quickly turns around expecting to see his Boss, however he dose
not see his Boss; instead his eyes are drawn to his Boss's offices
door.
With
tunnel vision he walks to his Boss's office as if something was
pulling him in.
He
slowly opens the door of the dimly lit room, only to see his Boss's
office completely untouched, except for his stack of small notes,
pen and chair.
As
Kassler makes his way closer to the desk, he sees the markings of
blood on the desk and chair as if someone with a life threatening
injury attempted to write a message.
Kassler
glimps at the writing on the note;
The
message on the note to Kassler from his Boss says:
“ If
you tell anyone, I will kill you. I am everywhere
-Your
Boss.”
Kassler
drops the note; the door slams shut.
FADE
OUT:
END
I had also done a quick rough concept of a the boss and will be further making concepts.
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